Golf: from the perspective of a very average 21 year old golfer

[JTfordouble]

Hi everyone, I was asked to write a blog for one of my classes at the University of Montana. I thought the piece I made would resonate with alot of people scrolling through this forum. If you'd take a minute to give it a read, it'd be greatly appreciated. It's short! https://unbelievab.ly/golf-from-the-perspective-of-a-very-average-21-year-old-golfer/

[Soloman1]

I'm going to be honest. You have a long way to go to become a proficient writer. You need to do some remedial study on grammar and syntax. If your career goal is to work in a field where you have to communicate at all in writing, you will lack credibility and professionalism. You'll pay a steep price later because people won't tell you, but you'll be known to them as the guy who can't spell.

 

If you are dyslexic or have a learning disability, that's different.

 

Learn the difference between alot and a lot. Learn how to use hyphens correctly. It's full-time job, not a full time job. You would not be appreciated, you would appreciate it. There are many examples like this in every paragraph.

 

Anything that is not advancing the topic toward the conclusion is clutter.

 

I hope you accept this and learn how to be a better writer. Good luck.

[Hawkeye77]

. . .  what is with the obsession of golf that has “all of the sudden” overcame . . .

 

I got that far and quit reading. A good assignment for a high school sophomore level English class would be to to find all of the errors, explain them and then rewrite.  College level writing? Yikes.

 

I'll read the rest when I'm not feeling crotchety, lol!

 

You have to understand that no matter how enthusiastic you are about whatever you are writing about, educated readers are only going to take so much in the way of fundamental errors involving grammar and usage.  

 

I remember years ago in a sub forum a youngster in middle school was asking questions about his paper and someone really took after him.  I told the guy, "Write your own damn paper!"  I meant it then and would now,  but I don't feel hypocritical in expecting more from a university level piece.

 

But . . . I haven't read it all and will tomorrow but only because it's on wrx and may be entertaining.

 

 

Edited September 21, 2020 by Hawkeye77

[miamistomp]

 Didn't the SATs used to have an English portion ?

[Hawkeye77]

So why wait until tomorrow?  Rest of it was just as bad from an English perspective.

 

Blaring music the "thing"?

 

Drinking a bunch of beers?  

 

The girls sitting by the phone waiting to hear you are done with the round? (Because apparently they don't play, lol).

 

Sounds like an immature 21 year old "brah" perspective. Not the perspective I had about golf at 21 or any of my friends, so I'm hoping you grow into the game as you get older and find other things about it that inspire you.

 

But, it's your perspective, you are 100% entitled to it and voicing that is part of what the university experience is about. So good for you for not being afraid to put it out there.

 

 

 

 

 

Edited September 21, 2020 by Hawkeye77

[tiderider]

1) if you're trying to find someone who will "put up with you for life", you might not find that person ... maybe change yourself so you have a larger pool from which to choose ... 

2) there is no requirement to have kids

3) no one's sitting by a phone for you ... if that is what you are expecting, then they're probably already looking for someone else to occupy their time ... 

4) time is running out on the opportunity to? ... do nothing? ... sleep late? ... lol ... life doesn't end when you grow up ... it gets a helluva lot more interesting ...